Crimson 

                I sit in a corner and pain fills every vein in my body. I grab the blade, the shiny dream killer. I feel it, hard, unforgiving, thirsty for my blood. I feel my flesh tear away, the tears come, They roll down and drip to the bottom of my chin and fall to oblivion. I take a long deep breath as the blade goes deeper. I lose my grasp from the pain and the blood soaked razor falls to the ground, sounding like a cannon shot as it hits the floor and rings through my mind. I feel all my pain leaveing my body along with my blood, it feels like insanity but soo much relief consumes me as i take my last breath of tainted air and close my eyes forever.  

                                         Ravenous73

 
   

 


 
 
krazyboo79 on
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I love it.
ravenous73 on
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thank you, i wrote it one night when i was about to do it. I had to get the feelings out before it killed me
blueeyedtawni on
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this is  me   in my own  personal hell...

 the pain is  what makes  it bearable

ravenous73 on
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this poem might as well been written in my blood cause if i didnt write it i would have done it.
blueeyedtawni on
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 memories  flit acrross  my mind ..

 the  razor makes  such memories

onewalrus on
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Ya, whatever.
ravenous73 on
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sorry you didnt like it, i do not fear critisism, as long as it is honest
onewalrus on
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It's just the contradiction of nihilism... a true nihilist wouldn't even bother to write. It's so easy for people who live where your life isn't threatened every time you walk out the door to glamorize and embelish on pain, blood and death.
ravenous73 on
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i wasnt glamorizeing it, i dont want to die, i wrote this because at a difficult time in my life it struck my mind to commit suicide, it was such a strong feeling that( it might sound stupid) the only way i could release my feelings was to write this poem to maybe satisfy my urges for it. So it worked and im still here, no regrets. I dont claim that my life is unbearably hard but its not easy to live in a world that thrives on pain blood and death as you well know. Just because im not there with you doesnt mean that i dont feel for the world and its torment which will soon end us all.
onewalrus on
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My mind, any mind has the ability to linger on unpleasant things. I fully acknowledge the pain and suffering in the world and the limits of my willingness and/or ability to feel it. I have been quoting Kurt Vonnegut lately, from an interview where he said, "Humans, dogs shouldn't be treated so badly."
ravenous73 on
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indeed they should'nt,  I do struggle some times at the fact of my birth, i feel sometimes if given the choice and knew of what was to come for me and my life and the world that seems to be falling apart at the seams, would i have said yes to life or declined it all together with discust. But my poetry mostly lies on my inner demons that i fight with that want to lash out at the inhumanity that is killing our right to be ourselves and those who just follow them in fear of persecution of difference.
onewalrus on
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We must be floating in similar waters. This latest leg of my voyage is over treacherous waters. It's just me and the boat and the best I can so is float aimlessly without bearings, purpose or mission. For myself, there is no humanity. No family or friends planning a rescue. No helicopter out of nowhere or cargo ship off course. I'm just waiting for the next big wave to toss me around into the night as I stare at the lost stars.
onewalrus on
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... hence my autobiographical movie titled Monk Slide... I am tiny man.
ravenous73 on
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very unique way of expression, i like it
ravenous73 on
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thank you for your comments, your honesty has been a pleasure
Schmertz on
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hm...HMMMM! MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM!
ravenous73 on
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hmmm?????????

Schmertz on
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yes, indeed, the hm is mmm.

ghostface on
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I really "felt" this.







P.S. I like your icon picture.
ravenous73 on
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thank you, it took me about 6 years before i showed anyone this poem because alot of the people around me would not have understood. They really dont know me very well, its kind of sad but i dont show them because they seem happier percieving me the way they expect me to be.

        Anyway im rambling, thank you the icon i like cause it reminds me of a dark soul screaming out to a world that wont hear him. Some what the way i feel in my every day life. 

ghostface on
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I understand that feeling tremendously.  You remind me a lot of Valentine. I bet the two of you would get along greatly.


You can ramble to me anytime!  I'm the ramble queen!!
ravenous73 on
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i bet we will too, thank you i shall ramble again with you soon

 
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