this post has inspired quite a readership. many blessings to the "he said/ she said love affair". smiles

 

thank you...I know it was long...I'm glad you took the time to read it through...this man and I...we feed off each other...it's amazing..

Harmony

Excellently and tastefully done; not pornlike at all.  Porn, wrapped in what gives me life; words, inspiring, tantalizing, erotic, and ....hot!

 

Love it!

thanks for taking the time to read it...you nailed it...you ought to be critic...for real...this (eroticism) is real life and those who don't get it or are offended by it just really haven't lived yet or are still wearing the "mask"!!!!!

 

H

Thank you for the compliment, dear...I would love to be a critic....glad i nailed it, but was not very hard for me to discern, with you speaking of "licking your juices", "sucking your sustenance" ,"lapping your intimate secretions" (num... ) , "grinding in ecstasy", "ferocious protuberances"....whew...to name a few....

 

Bold, yet discreet....as I said, excellent.

yes...and would you agree that those terms are rather nebulous (liable to more than one interpretation)?...that's where the artistry comes in for a writer...the classic use of the 'double entendre'' is an incalculable talent to a writer when wanting to take the reader to the 'water' but letting him decide whether or not he/she wants to 'drink'...I guess only true artists who create from the soul's history are ready for me...what do your think?...(she said, smiling)

 

H

I guess i am a true artist, because I am ready for more....I say with glee!  Love the play on words, the double entendres....make for interesting reading, and discovery, as in a scavenger hunt.... bring on the protuberances any time, I have long been lacking in sustenance gained from their ministrations....

...here's to all us 'insatiable animals"....hahahahahhaaaaaaaa.  and also, it's not just the play on words but it's the ability to 'turn a phrase' so as to leave it to the readers discretion to choose a suitable accompanying image...(every time I read your last sentence, I crack up...you are quite the wordsmith..

H

why thank you ma'am; it takes one to know one....giggle...and yes, you are right...definitely takes skill....but we got it, hey?

This is another excellent post. Too erotic? absolutely not! Porny...again it is nowhere close.

Congratulations on being able to put exactly what you see in your mind into words on the page. Though you may have a point about it being a bit long. God I love puns.

Thank you...I appreciate your input....btw, you made me laugh out loud...not only are you bright and witty, you're funny as all get out!

H

Thank you. I note that you seem to appreciate many forms of writing....good for you

My first thoughts: this is an affair built not on love, but on an insatiable infatuation.  The only action is taking place online, "in the ether" as you call it.  It's delicious because no "real" touching is going on and everything is taking place inside the mind.

 

My lasting impressions:  I feel like I am reading someone's personal journal entry and so I don't want to critique it like I would if someone were presenting to me a poem for publication.  It has a boudoir-like voyeurism to it.  Not porn, but sexually intense, and ultimately does not leave me wanting to read more.  There are parts that can stand out on their own as vignettes, otherwise it tends to dribble down the page like saliva after a good love making.

 

The little pet peeve that irks me about it:  You spelled "breathe" as "breath" -- something a lot of people tend to do without realizing it.  Honest mistake, but irritating!  So the following sentence should be:  You see, it’s impossible for me to lay my mouth upon the terrain of your heart and suck, suck, suck, coveting the life it has for me, without, as I BREATHE to live...

 

What keeps me from calling it a masterpiece:  It's too personal, it's something you have attached closely to your heart, and so I'm reluctant to give you a full critique at the risk of hurting your heart. 

 

My psychic impression: this is a relationship, the one between "he said, she said", that is not meant to last and could possibly be a dangerous association.  The two people here are masterbating, not communicating.  Like a delicate piece of fruit, it will whether away.

 

My favorite line:  "After all.... the Tin Man had Dorothy who unwittingly wandered into the forest.  His heart began to beat."  I think you got something significant there.

 

Forgive me if I seem aloof.  I used to work as an editor for a literary magazine.  It's rare for me to find something I can truly say is remarkable, something that stands out from the rest of what is being written out there.  All I have left to say is keep writing to find yourself and you will stumble upon a truth no one else may see.