Impressive!  More, please.

Heh. I don't know how long it'll be before I can come up with another story like that. It's the first full short story I've written in a long time.

Although, I was thinking about writing a different story based on an offshoot of this idea. I mean, this story was about "What if everybody had access to time machines?" and the only way I could see it working was if causality refused altering predestination. But since I wrote that, I think I've found a way that you could have ubiquitous Time Travel, and still allow causality to get totally screwed up.

But that's getting into egghead territory, and I'll have to write it out before it makes sense to anyone (especially me).

Wow, I've had to look up three of the words you used.  I am smarter now than I was 2 minutes ago.  I like haging around with you. 

You know the saying, good things come to those who wait.  I'm a good waiter (and not the food kind). 

Whoops. Sorry about the egghead reply. You hang around the sci-fi group long enough, you pick up their technobabble.

Basically, what I was saying was that, if everybody had time machines, we'd never make any mistakes (because we'd always back up and do it the right way), we'd all be immensely rich (which means that no one would ever be rich), people would be shot at random for no good reason (because of future grudges), and basically the whole timeline would be chaos. That's why I set up "you can't change anything" law.

But I've been thinking about it some more, and I think I found a way to make the "everybody has a time machine" thing to work without screwing up the timeline, and still allowing them to change the past. I've got to mess with it more in my head, but it could make for a good story.

Sorry I didn't get back to you right away. You really got me working overtime here. I found myself thinking about your story line.  I think I understand how you are going to make it work.  At any rate, you got me thinkin...I can't wait. Will be there with sleeping bag in tow to form the line at the bookstore.

You're too kind. Well, what with fixing up this story, and making some headway on the other two that I left hanging (Justin's story, and Peter the Killer), it may be a while before I can get back to this. Besides, I still have other projects that aren't even involved in writing.

In fact, tonight I'm working on setting up two Podcasts. The first one will be a daily update of my radio station "Shivers Radio", and the other will be me reading old blog entries. I know, reading old blog entries sounds boring and pedantic, but I think I've got some that would work for a podcast.

And, of course, I'm still trying to make time to create the Great American Video Game. Phew! It's sad to realize that, if I had a stopwatch that could actually stop time, I would only use it to get more work done.

That's okay. I understand priorities.  I don't have an IPod so I'm going to miss out on Podcasting.  I think reading your blogs would be interesting.  We read things and insert our own inflections, it would be good to hear it from the writer's perspective. I read my blogs out loud to myself before I post them to make sure they don't sound stupid  - again, inserting my own inflection.

Don't burn yourself out. You have a lot going on. 

I do the same thing, with reading blogs out loud. It helps a lot.

BTW, you don't need an IPod to get a Podcast. There are programs that will grab Podcast feeds, and put them on your computer so that you can listen to them any time. For windows, the best ones are IPodder or Doppler, while the Mac has the program IPodderX. Of course, there's always ITunes, as well, but I'm not listed there.Yet. 

Cool!  I'll see if I can get one of them.  Thanks!

HOT DAMN!!!!!

And you claim you haven't even cleaned it up yet!!!!!

Thanks, I'm pretty proud of it, even though I still think it's rough.

You'll notice that almost nobody has any description (some of the characters are "the boy" or "the man". I'm not really happy with the "inspirational speech" yet, either. So, yeah, the structure's there, but there's a lot of room for improvement.

It's bloody good, there are places that could recieve some more detail, but it's still bloody good.

Chills!

This is good Brand.

Thx.

i can see where you'd say that its still rough. it felt incomplete to me too, maybe the ending needs a different punch to it ? somehow was feeling a little let down.
the great thing is it doesn't go into expected territory of making the bystander a killer or something (thats what i expected initially).
there was a story by asimov which reads as a sort of prelude to this. can't remember the name right now.
classy effort. those goddamn ideas never seem to come   

SEV

I think the major failing is in that last speech. If I can make it powerful enough, and make the scene cut off right after that, it would seem more like a climax. Still, it's a start. Right now, I'm letting it sit, and not even looking at it, so I can get a fresh perspective when I edit it.