So this is a song I wrote...and I need you to criticize it :)

 

Walkin down those lonely roads

I see your face

And I know I am not alone

Lookin back I see

That you were always there

To find a friend like you

Is really somethin rare

 

Today is a new day

I know I'm not the same

Never thought I'd live to see

the light of a new way

Today is a new day

I can't believe my eyes

You are always here with me

And you know I'll try

To be there for you

 

All these new and unknown faces

Try to take me

To frightening places

If you held my hand

I know I'd make it through

So now I stand up tall

While I hold onto you

 

Today is a new day

I know I'm not the same

Never thought I'd live to see

the light of a new way

Today is a new day

I can't believe my eyes

You are always here with me

And you know I'll try

To be there for you

 

You know I'll always miss you (miss you)

And even though I try (trust me I try)

I can't hold back these tears that flow (oh)

As we say goodbye

 

Oh, oh, yeah

 

Today is a new day

I know I'm not the same

Never thought I'd live to see

the light of a new way

Today is a new day

I can't believe my eyes

You are always here with me

And you know I'll try

To be there for you

 
   

 


 
 
animemastera on
Re: New Day (Say Goodbye)
Egad! Critise? That?! Are you crazed?! That's a beautiful song! Not overly gushy, but still, a lot of feeling packed in there!


What's the beat? Upbeat, slow, rappish(please, no! I mean I like rap...just...this song...no. xD)?


It's sweet, though. Nice write.
dotdotcurve on
Re: New Day (Say Goodbye)
Hehe it's more upbeat than anything else...but it's still a work in progress, the melody I came up with sounds too familiar, although I don't know to what...

 

I'm glad you like it, and thanks for the compliment

goodnightsong on
Re: New Day (Say Goodbye)
Well whatdya waitin for?!? Record it and let's hear it! The lyrics are beautiful!

 
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