My dearest darlingest wife is a reading specialist in a high school, and she told me about an interesting exercise I thought I’d share with all of you.

What words can you think of to describe a hot day?

Sweaty
Sultry
Sauna
Simmering
Searing
Humid
Heat
Burn
Blaze
Fire

What other ones can you think of?  Plenty, right?

Now, can you describe a hot day without using any of those words?

Perhaps you’ll describe a group of kids playing in the street as a fire hydrant sprays them with water.  Or a dog lying outside, panting tongue dragging across the high grass.  What about a boy leaning in to lick an ice cream cone and finding that his treat has melted almost instantly?

Would you create the idea of an image shimmering over black concrete, or have the very blackness of that tar seeming to bubble off and evaporate?  

What would you do?  You would paint a picture, you would invent a scene, you would create that all important tone: atmosphere.     

You could write, “the day was hot.”  Or you could create a whole world for your reader.

Why don’t you do that now?  In as many words as you want, craft a scene of a hot day, without using any synonyms for the word hot.  Post it as a comment. Leave your name if you’d like.  And your age.  And anything else you want to tell us about yourself.  Create your ideal hot world, and let’s see how inventive you can be.  

I can’t wait to discover what you can do.  I bet it’ll be hot.  
 
   

 


 
 
sandyquill on
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It was the kind of day that made your pores long for snow.  The air clung to my skin like a wet rag.  Even sitting was too much like work, unless the seat was under a rapidly spinning fan.

Summer in South Florida.  And it's only February.
booksay on
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That was terrific!  No wonder you're such a famous, world-renowned word artist!
sandyquill on
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<snort!>  Uh huh.  lol
shorty33 on
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Snow. Snow. Snow. Oh come on! It seems as if we can't stand winter, but when i can fry an egg on the car, we want it! The horrid irony of it all. Looking over at my boyfriend, i really wonder how this could get worse. All i want is a hug, but i'm just so grossed out at all that sweat! Lucky me. Taking me sunglasses off, i look up. Ugh! I wonder if this is what scott on x-men feels like when he uses his lazzer vision. Poor him. I'm tempted to jump into that creek behind his house and that's desperate since i cant swim. I close my eyes and imagine penguins, snowman, and a nice cup of coco. Great! I can't get away from it! My sandals sizzle at the touch as i run across the shiny pavement, across the street and run right through a door. Relief. Air condition was a invention to be praised. I open my eyes and relize this is not my house, this day truelly has pushed me to the point of insanity. I apoligize and walk back out into the oven.

-Breanna.R age 16, junior in ohio-

booksay on
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Very charming!
shorty33 on
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thanks ^-^
margauxelenore on
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After the third day of subjection to ultraviolet radiation, I was waiting red crust on my shoulders to crack; like when a spoon hits a crème brulee.  The tautness of skin was constantly battling with my inner commentary telling me that sunscreen was for wimps (and those intelligent enough to remember it). Irish heritage, low melanin, and lack of shade are not a good combination. The sun reflected up from prairie grass, ensuring that I baked evenly from all directions. I could stare into the sun without looking up as it reflected off the back of my hammer head. My old basketball shirt stuck to my back, and I dried my hand to ensure my grip while I pounded the poles in to the cracked earth. The usual temperature that laughter gives to the breath of my brother could not be distinguished from the moving air around me, but I knew it was there as the wind wrapped the old floral bed sheet around me and he smiled. He saved me from my suffocating entrapment.

 It was one of those moments that I thought perhaps if I was alone I would have died; those kind of random deaths that we avoid today because we are cell phone calls away from help, ambulance rides away from hospitals. Was it possible in another time my death would have been the senseless act of summer weather and a bed sheet? Most likely not, but it was a thought; and I could not help but grin at the thought as I rolled out of my mummification of sweat and weird 90’s fabric.

We fastened the makeshift tent material to the ground, making slits for doorways. We climbed inside our hut, its shallow height and sloping sides did not inconvenience us too much, and we poured overly-sunned water down our throats. We let the doors flap on each side of our tent untethered to keep the tent from becoming a stagnate steamer. I used the last of my water to soften my leathered shoulders, knowing my sister would arrive in a few minutes with a quantity of lemonade that would have sustained armies in nice weather; I would probably fight my brother for the last drop considering the gods had blessed this day with mercury movements in the thermometer not seen in the last five years summers …

margauxelenore on
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Oops! Guess I didn't pay too much attention. 17 years old, Margaux Elenore.
booksay on
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No, no, that was really excellent.  And you're only 17!  I'm quite impressed.  
margauxelenore on
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Thanks, but it's not really that impressive. Just random thoughts. Thanks for the idea, it was really amusing.

booksay on
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Hey, you're supposed to blindly accept compliments.  Don't insult me by rejecting it!
margauxelenore on
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I am afraid I am one of those who cannot stand being complimented. No insult intended

 
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